Pitch Madness Entry

Yes, like so many others, I entered Brenda Drake’s PITCH MADNESS. I waited, stressed, freaked out, and refreshed more times than I care to admit. In the end, I did NOT get one of those treasured emails inviting me to the second round. And, thats okay. It is, I mean… It’s not the end of the world, right?

I’m sure those who got in worked as hard, if not harder, than I did. I’m squeeing for each of them.

Am I disappointed?


Am I crushed?


Wanna know why? Hope so, because I’m going to tell you anyway.

My husband LOVES ‘Michigan Peaches.’ Every spring he waits, not so patiently, for the farm stands to get ‘Michigan Peaches.’

They’re not regular peaches, not peaches from Michigan, not even Michigan peaches. They are ‘Michigan Peaches.’ His all time favorite kind of peach.

He washes the whole haul and sets them in the fridge, waiting for them to get cold. Then, I find him for days, noshing on the juicy sweet orbs from heaven.

The thing is, I hate peaches. All peaches. From Gerber’s First Foods, to the prized ‘Michigan Peaches’ that satisfy my hubands peach desires.

I just do not like the taste, smell or texture of a peach.


In my mind, if I don’t love his idea of perfect, how can I be upset that someone else didnt like mine? Meaning my book.

So, as far as how I feel about not moving on to the second round of PITCH MADNESS, I say ~ I don’t like peaches.

Someday, someone will love my MS. I’m ‘Faethful’ it will happen. And until it does, I’ll keep plugging away. Writing when I can, helping my CP’s out when they need me, and telling the stories I keep seeing in my head.


So like so many others, here is my PITCH MADNESS entry. Enjoy.



Discovering Faeth

YA Urban Fantasy

89,000 words


High school’s easy, unless the Oaltz are looking for you. Discover how Faeth meets her best friend, falls in love, and tries to stay alive while keeping a deadly secret – she’s not human.



“I’m coming, I’m coming. Geez! You don’t have to break down the front door!”

Whoever’s pounding better have a good reason for beating on it long enough to pull me from my Friday night shower. On Fridays, I don’t have to watch the clock. I can stand under the water as long as I want, soaking its heat into every pore of my body without worrying about my parents needing the bathroom. It’s usually the best shower of the week.

I reach up, wrapping my hair in a towel. Bubbles scrunch against my ears. Great, I didn’t rinse well enough. I can’t win tonight. I yank a shirt and shorts over my still dripping body as the pounding intensifies on the front door.

Each stair thuds under my feet as I tromp down them. On the last one, my damp foot slips, sending me crashing into the roller blades I’d left leaning against the wall. Fury bubbling in my eyes, I swing open the door to a woman whose night seems worse than mine. Her tear-stained eyes squint against the glare of the overhead light. Peeking from the cavernous folds of her rain-soaked cloak is a chapped-cheeked little boy, his stare – gaping and hollow. As I open my mouth to speak, she cuts me off.

“Is the Bean Leighis here?” Her raspy voice is straight from a nightmare.

“Excuse me?” I choke out.

“I need to see her.” Her voice crawls inside my skin, etching its way to my heart.



5 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. Amanda Salisbury @shyjot
    Mar 18, 2013 @ 13:17:04

    Thanks for sharing your entry. I appreciate your perspective on your book, as I share that perspective, sans peaches.

    The first phrase in your pitch distracted me because, in my world view, high school was not easy. Perhaps academically or socially or what have you, but I’m not sure I believe high school is easy. Otherwise, the pitch doesn’t stand out from a lot of other YA books – friendship, love, secrets. What makes your book different from the others?

    My book is a hero’s journey, and the thing that makes it different (I hope) is that the main character is the last surviving Confederate slave-mutant. Your book must be in some way unique, and that differentness is what your pitch needs.

    Your voice shines through the writing. The opening sentence needs a punch. The dialogue in that first sentence is somewhat cliched. However, I would keep reading.

    Remember, I’m a lowly querier, too, so take all this with a good dose of salt. Best wishes for your endeavors!


  2. Fida I
    Mar 18, 2013 @ 15:24:21

    Ugh! I don’t like cliffhangers! Yet you have a great start to your story. Something similar to something that changes her night.


  3. Misses Rivera
    Mar 18, 2013 @ 17:13:50

    I dont like peaches, either. Metaphorically speaking. Literally, I think they’re okay, but I prefer nectarines.


  4. Veronica
    Mar 27, 2013 @ 13:05:16

    Don’t worry, Brenda does a lot of contests and there’s always the next one! In the meantime, if you’re looking for pitch or query help, hit me up! I’m always happy to help out a fellow Thursday’s Child.


    • lnrussell
      Mar 27, 2013 @ 13:09:00

      I may just do that! I’m always looking for fresh eyes! (Read as fresh CP or Beta readers who will tell me , hey this needs another look, or Hey, this needs deleted, lol) Thanks. =-)


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